James Finn
Feb 15, 2023

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Very interesting!!

As for the mistake, I think it's in here:

"The beautiful rolling hills and charming towns of Short Hills were the perfect backdrop for their road trip. But as they ventured further into the heart of the state, ..."

The story makes it sound like they've arrived in Short Hills even though they keep going, then the story mentions the towns of Short Hills, as if Short Hills were a region of the state and not a single town.

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James Finn
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